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My Awful Mistake - India

8/29/2018

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​My Awful Mistake
 
I strolled up to the building by the river, where the cooking show was being filmed. I walked up the stairs and popped on my apron. I waited until we could begin; the longer I waited, the more nervous I became. I started to cook a steak, with mashed potatoes and gravy. An hour had passed. I was putting my dish together - the cooked steak and its accompaniments. Time was up; I was called to present my dish. I put my plate down on the table and the judges cut into it. “It’s way too pink,” exclaimed the judge. I was devastated!
 
 
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Mrs A ( Team 100WC)
8/30/2018 09:06:55 am

I just knew that something was going to happen! Oh no!

I really liked how you added detail and set the atmosphere, India. Next time for repeated words like, 'waited' try and find an alternative synonym that fits.

Thanks for a good read!

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