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The Birthday Bump Up -Bella

9/6/2018

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​I was so excited, tomorrow was my birthday!
 I really wanted a pink pet pig and my Mum said if I agreed to clean up after it, then yes.
I ran into my parent’s room.
“Hello Mum! What have you got there?” I asked wide eyed as mum struggled to hide something under the covers. She slowly uncovered them to show a… 
PIG!
I screamed but when I took a second look I saw that it wasn’t the normal pig colour. It was brown, just brown. “It’s a pig from the shelter isn’t it adorable?”
“Yes, but what colour should it be?” I asked disappointedly           
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jpearce@ggs.vic.edu.au
9/9/2018 03:04:44 am

Great use of direct speech and correct punctuation in this piece, Bella.
And a very imaginative story line. It is great to have something exciting happen, even in as short a space as 100 words.
Well done!

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