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Why Would I Do That - Milo

8/16/2018

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“Why would I do that” I hear Sirens, I start to run, they are getting closer I make a turn into the alleyway I keep looking behind me… Splat. I wake up in the hospital my head hurts I can't see, everything's a blur once my vision is back to normal I realize there are 2 police officers at the door I get up and jump threw the window then I sprint, I hear the police sirens getting closer and closer and BAM! I'm shot in the leg i'm cumbusting with blood Why would I do that, why would I kill a man!
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Rachel O'Neill
8/19/2018 05:54:52 am

Powerful writing Milo. More punctuation would help make it easier to read, but I got the intensity and speed of the story from the way you write. The back story - that your character has killed somebody - was a surprise at the end, but explained the running.
Rachel

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